The points of rhetorical analysis that you mention early in your paper are good elements to start with, but you will need to explain their effects in terms of their rhetorical force, their ability to affect how a reader approaches or thinks about the articles topic. You seem to forget that you meant to discuss pathos, ethos, and logos appeals, and instead you develop your analysis in terms of the arguments content, not its form. As you revise, focus your analysis on the rhetorical elements of the article word choice, style, voice, tone, appeals to a readers emotions or reasoning, significance of evidence used to support key arguments, etc. and review the sample rhetorical analysis I posted on our Blackboard course page!
You write very well, I think the next thing to focus on now are subject-verb agreement and missing articles. Please make sure that you take one or more drafts to the Writing Center as you revise!
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http://www.nytimes.com/2007/04/09/world/asia/09iht-englede.1.5198685.html?pagewanted=all&_r=1&
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